#334 of 365 – 4 Haiku

4 Haiku



hands, old with grieving

gently touch the memories

wall of fallen souls




eyes wading in grief

warm, naked with loneliness

and longing for joy




soft change in her breaths

dreams creep in under glasses

she falls asleep in




next to her, I watch

the beauty of her sleeping

where she knows she’s loved





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Poet, sculptor, jewelry maker, writer, spouse, parent, crazy person - not necessarily in that order.
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4 Responses to #334 of 365 – 4 Haiku

  1. pi314chron says:

    You got it all together in these four, Merle! There is a maturity in haiku expression that amazes me. Honestly, neither you nor I always exhibit that maturity but these are worthy of a haiku master who has been writing for 30 years or so. Now…that said…in the last haiku, I would strongly suggest that the word “just” is intrusive to the rhythm and serves no good poetic purpose. If you will read the haiku aloud WITH the word and again WITHOUT it, I believe (and hope) you will agree. Again, marvelous work, Merle! ❤

  2. Fig Tree Chance says:

    Wow, I never cease to be impressed. I especially like the 2nd one–“eyes wading in grief” is exceptional; and the image in the 3rd is wonderful, “dreams creeping under glasses”. It’s all fab.

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